Ungshungmi Rungsung hails from Manipur and has studies studied Computer Science and Mathematics. He is an avid reader of philosophy, blogger and loves poetry. A creative person that he is, Ungshungmi enjoys graphic designing as his hobby.
Please enjoy his winning entry in OWAQ’16, The Purple Lilac.
He walked beside the long hearse,
Awfully wet from the cold rain,
Donning his most treasured prize—
His wedding suit.
This cancer that took his wife away
This bloody hell of a disease!
He watched his wife in agony,
As life drained from her pale white face.
Those short hours before her breath departed,
How she fought for sanity,
For life, and just a little more time.
And how he prayed
That he’d take her place instead.
He remembered their happiest day—
She—dressed in the prettiest white,
A jewel above jewels, a queen among queens.
He vowed with all he had,
Through thick and thin, in sickness and in health
Till death renders this love asunder.
And now, like a helpless moth felt he
In the cold icy hand of death.
He remembered their first fight
Where her eyes lit up like wildfire
And shed the most delicate tear.
Quickly he reached out his hand to wipe her tears,
In empty air—as she disappeared in the mist
How he wished he could take it all back.
He recalled their dreams dreamt together
Her laughter—now making him weep
Her tears—now making him laugh inside.
All the banal moments no longer so.
She was the elixir of his joy—not life—but joy!
His sorrows melt before her,
His agonies flee like the morning dew
At the first touch of sunlight.
He will miss her like the flower misses the sun
In the depths of winter.
Farewell my love, his weary lips muttered
As he planted her favourite purple lilac on her tomb.
Death the enemy, and yet death—
The revealer of love!
#1 The approach is uneven. At some places, it just takes the reader along with it, and on some places it fails miserably to do so. However, in the end it seems like it is written in the form of a recollection of past happy and sad times. But, the beginning seems completely disconnected with the ending. The expressions are decent, but could have been better.
#2 The closing line makes quite an impact. There is good use of imagery. The story, although an emotional take, sounds too much of a cliche.
#3 The ending is really beautiful and enlightening. The poetry is, however, like many others and how a marital relationship is. Nothing new is being shared or explored from a different angle except for the ending.