Fiction

All This While

  • Poignant and deep post. Nicely written. 🙂

    Wait, this is the new prompt by blogchatter? Didn’t we get it like an hour ago?

    • Yes! But I had this story in drafts already. So I made little changes to suit the prompt, polished it and published! And thanks for your encouragement, especially at this terrible time of night 🙂

  • Ramya

    Wonderful post. Lovely and deep. 🙂

  • anindya sundar basu

    Mansi – great piece. Enjoyed reading this . Please keep posting stories like these.

    • Sure, Anindya! Hoping to write our group prompt as a short story too.

  • Kala Ravi

    Fantastic Mansi, very well written! The flow, the melodrama, the emotions all came together so well!

  • Rohan Sonalkar

    Nice. Wee bit jumpy for me. Bit since you’re encompassing a lifetime in a few sentences, this is the best way to do it.

    • Yeah, I know. I wanted to keep it crisp and yet not ‘narrate’ the story like children’s books do. Anyway, you get it and thank for your appreciation 🙂

  • Awesome read .. loved your style of writing.. keep it up 🙂

  • Modern Gypsy

    Very interesting! I enjoyed the back and forth in time and the way you tied it all together.

    • Thank you dear! All these comments are really encouraging 🙂

  • richasingh

    Mansi, I am a little stunned in the end. Because somewhere it does reveal how we work… look at the pattern and move away from what might be beneath.. Loved it. Loved it.

    • Thank you Richa for the thoughtful, deep comment and thank you for reading this 🙂

  • Mayuri R

    I loved this Mansi…& I agree with Richa. 🙂

    • Thank you Mayuri for stopping by and reading and appreciating my story 🙂